Name Sheyahni.
On a hot sunny Saturday my family and I had a swim in our huge pool. First my family and I got up and had rice bubbles for breakfast. Next my family and I went to put our togs on. Then we went to go unlock the gate with our key. After that we went to jump into the pool. Then I tried to do a bomb but I back slapped and everyone started to laugh and I started to cry because it heat so bad that I did a back slapped in our pool. The next day when we went for another swim Laviniah backed slapped to and we all started to laugh because she backed slapped. Finally we went to get changed and go to get some lunch for us we had chinese for lunch and Mcdonalds for dinner. That was the best day I ever had.
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ReplyDeleteThank you harmony for commenting on mine and I will make sure it is true.
DeleteAmazing Story Sheyahni my favourite sentence was when you explained that you backed slapped and cried, you can improve more by re-reading your story before you post and work more on your punctuation and next time you post a story make sure your stories that you post are true. Thank you Harmony
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